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Saturday, August 7, 2010

Painful Smart-Talk #1

"Communicative processes that happen within a virtual interaction are the vehicle for conveying collective identity to its users."

Now I ask you: what was that sentence about? I had it in context and still had to read it three times. *beats author with pillow* Abstract, abstract, abstract! You want to be understood, right? Then cut down on the redundant words! 'Communicative' and 'interaction' mean the same thing. You can say 'conveys' in one word: you don't need five. Argh. -_- And 'a virtual interaction' doesn't even make sense!

Dear author: I want to read this article! I want to know what you're talking about! So why, why, why do you have to make it so hard?

End rant.

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